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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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Due to the rise
of
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population
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,
people
 need more
food
 to eat.
However
, a country should not utilise
insects
 based
food
 as a
food
 source because eating them has
a negative effects
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a negative effect
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 on earth. Using edible
insects
 as
a
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food
a portion of food
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food
 is believed one of the best ways to meet the growing need for
food
. In fact, there are some benefits if we use them as
a
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food
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food
. The reason is that
people
 can capture a lot of
insects
 easily compared to other animals,
such
 as cows and pigs.
For instance
, it takes
long
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 time for cows to grow up and they need large space to be adults.
This
 avoids
people
 from raising a lot of cows.
On the other hand
, time and space do not have a relationship with raising
insects
.
However
, eating
insects
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insect
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 based products affects the earth negatively.
This
 is because if a lot of
insects
 are used as
a
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food
, it has a possibility to break a
food
 chain.
This
 world is stable because there are predators and
food
. In fact,
insects
 are the
food
 source for other animals.
For instance
,
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frog
Frogg
frogg
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frogs
 can live on eating flies. Even if
people
 eat most of
flies
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the flies
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 in the world,
frogg
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frogs
Frogg
 are not able to survive due to
the
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food
 loss.
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Then
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Them
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Then
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, the
next
 predator which
eat
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eats
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Frogg
frog
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frogg
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frogs
 will have
a negative effects
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a negative effect
negative effects
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. As it shows, eating too much
insects
 based products can lead to losing our
food
,
such
 as beef and chicken. To sum up, there are some benefits of using
insects
 as
a
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food
a portion of food
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food
.
In contrast
, eating
insects
 affects the
food
 chain negatively.
Thus
, a
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country
coutry
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country
 does not have to regard edible
insects
 as a
food
 source.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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