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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The living place is the biggest focus point for every person's decision. There are a few
people
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 who believe that living in big
cities
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 makes
people
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's
health
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 to get worst. In my opinion, I totally agree about
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 statement.
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 is better than huge
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 by separating
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health
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problem
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 into two portions including physical
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 and mental
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. The
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problem
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 that affects physical
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is
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pollution
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a pollution
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problem
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. There are a lot of cars that are used in big societies. As everyone knows, various pollutions
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 as carbon monoxide, carbon dioxide, and nanoparticles that are totally impacted our
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 are introduced by car combustion.
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, according to PM 2.5 in Bangkok which has more than other
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, traffic congestion cause trouble walking
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 around the street. When they inhale the air atmosphere, these particles will danger to their respiratory system in order to develop cancer.
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, most
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 prefer to live in smaller
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 to prevent air pollution problems.
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, the
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problem
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 is
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mental
health
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problem
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. The monetary
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 is the biggest
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 that everyone is aware of. When
people
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 compared the money usage that they need to prepare for survival, they have to spend more money for staying in urban rather than others. The depression level will increase and mental
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 damage can occur,
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.
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, living in the biggest city can develop stress levels to become increasing. In conclusion, Big
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 are the developed place that allows
people
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 to contact the new trend in their lifestyle, while I totally agree that living in huge
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 impacts
people
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's
health
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.
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 is more comfortable than bigger
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.
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 living in the city is convenient for
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 to find work and improve their life quality, a field of
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 who lived in urban decided to live in the countryside after retirement in order to reduce the risk of air pollution factor and financial problems.
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