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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foregin language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advanantages of this outweight the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include some relevant examples.

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Some experts believed that it's better for
children
 to start learning a foreign
language
 before secondary
school
,
instead
 of starting right from secondary
school
, I couldn't agree more with the given statement, because, toddlers used to pick up new skills more easily than teens, and
on the other hand
, it
also
 makes them feel a bit overwhelmed with it, We will discuss both sides in the below essay,
To begin
 with, It is known that infants learn languages a lot faster than kids who age past 10 because they were so enthusiastic and willing to learn anything,
This
 helps them grasp a foreign
language
 like their own native
language
,
for instance
, in our state Muslim
children
 and Rajasthani
children
 know more than one
language
, just because they were living along with us and
also
 speaking their native
language
 in their own homes.
This
 is evident that
children
 learning a new
language
 other than their own
language
 in primary
school
 is healthier for their own. On the other side, It can be a bit overwhelming to kids, starting off their primary
school
 with secondary
language
, and teachers emphasising it makes them left stressed out. Not to mention, not all are successful at learning a new
language
,
for example
, all private schools have made a curriculum mandating a
second
language
, and even though most of the students learnt it, it is hugely limited with the phrases or sentences that they learnt on the institution,
that is
 all, little to none of the same students are willing to pursue it
further
 to enhance their
language
. By
this
, we can safely think that most of them are not even bothered about it. In conclusion, Even though few experts believed that it is better for
children
 to learn a foreign
language
 at an early stage of
school
instead
 of secondary
school
, a few of them learn it no matter the circumstances, and a large number of people are thinking it is just a mandatory subject to complete on their academics.
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