Obesity is a problem especially in rich Countries. What causes it and how can it be solved?

These days in developed nations,
overweight
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being overweight
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is becoming a serious issue.
This
comes in
as a result
of eating too much junk
food
and living a sedentary lifestyle and
this
can be managed by exercising at
gym
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and increasing charges on fast
food
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companies
campanies
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companies
. One of the reasons why people are having excess weight is because they enjoy buying quick
food
.
That is
to say, these types of meals contain a lot of sugar and carbohydrates which
builds
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up the body
thus
gaining more weight. A
second
reason is living a
luxury
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luxurious
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life which doesn't allow them to exercise or do any hard work. If
this
happens, it causes
a
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peace of mind which
let's
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parents or children
build-up
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more kilograms.
For example
, in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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,Kingdom
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there are a lot of men and women who face
a
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challenge of weighing a lot of kilograms
as a result
of consuming sugary snacks. One of the solutions to these issues is raising the charges
sugary
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businesses.
In other words
, if more bills are charged
on
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quick
food
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companies
campanies
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companies
, the managers will
also
increase their
selling
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sales
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prices and few customers will come around or the number of times they buy will decrease.
Furthermore
, the government should
also
encourage families to
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exercise
execrise
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exercise
more frequently as a team and
this
will not only improve their health but
also
leave them happy.
For instance
, in
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United
Uinted
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the Uinted
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states, all students are encouraged to participate in any sport of their choice in order to fight obesity. In conclusion, enjoying luxury life and eating too much junk
food
has caused more weight but the good news is there is a solution.
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