Air pollution is currently a big issue in most industrialized cities causing respiratory problems and changes in weather patterns. What do you think are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce air pollution?

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These days, our world has
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to the past. It can clearly be seen that many areas have turned into
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industrialized zone.
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a negative consequences
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our health and weather.
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which
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in the following paragraph. The
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factories
. We all
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that one
manufacturer
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building
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huge
pollution
and it spread all over the cities.
Furthermore
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from
this
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types of toxic chemical which
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our respiratory system if we breathe in too much.
However
, we can stop
this
issue by
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up new law where each
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have a limit to release
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waste, so the
air
pollution
will be more clean and
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to our lungs. A related factor is gasoline vehicles. On average, people usually dominate individual private
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, so if we calculate
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the population
then
there are over 7
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cars
nowadays. According to the graph of
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average
pollution
, each
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cause an enormous daily.
As a result
, our cities are full of fog with
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air
.
Nevertheless
, we can reduce
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of private vehicles by
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public transportation
instead
, so the average amount of
pollution
will decrease. In conclusion. The main reason which toxical
air
is
factories
and gasoline
cars
. If we wish to change our environment,
then
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of
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demolished. Meanwhile, we can switch to
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public vehicles to decrease the number of private
cars
. If we combine both of these methods
then
our
air
will be much greater to our body and weather.
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