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More and more people are buying through the online shopping in last decade. Do you think, it is positive or negative development

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In our up-to-date life, the most individuals are purchasing products via the internet compared to the
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 10 years ,whether buying by the online shopping is a positive or a negative trend among customers. From my point of view, purchasing online is a positive development. There is no doubt that buying through the online shopping have coused more merits than cons. For
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 thing, it does not require a queue. More preciesely, a lot of offline shoppers complain of long queues
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 online shopping is preferred by many purchaser. Take as an example: according to statistics,
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 of the most famous stores in the world, crowded with customers, is WalMart located in New York. Here people spend a lot of time to buy
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 thing. For another online shopping is a great help to purchase products from long distances. As a matter of fact, individuals have the opportunity to buy unique products from a department store located in another corner of the world through the delivery service.
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: amazon.com,
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 of the largest online stores, delights its customers through product quality and delivery. To be sure,
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 of the biggest negative aspects of online shopping is the increasing number of frauds.
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 reasonable to the extend that A lot of online shopping scams are caused by fraudsters trying to trick people into trusting them and trick them out of their money.
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 online shopping are helpful in most cases. In final analysis, despite the fact that buying online does not require a queue
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 to that it helps to purchase from market which is located in another places that's way it's
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 of the most best way to purchase.
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