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Some people say that television should be mainly used to educate and inform viewers, while others believe it should be used for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that
television
 should be restricted to broadcasting factual based content, whereas some are saying it should be only used for entertainment.
This
 essay will state that,
although
 the use of
television
 for informative purposes can seem as necessary, I strongly believe that
television
 is an item which is associated with entertainment.
Television
 is an important information channel with the ability to reach millions of people, instantly.
Therefore
, broadcasting educational or informative programs, like a documentary can be beneficial for the government if they want to increase awareness about an issue in the general public,
such
 as global warming, economic crises or updated Covid-19 guidelines. Personally, I believe that TV plays an essential role in obtaining knowledge about the most current issues in my community because I do not read newspapers.
On the other hand
, citizens, particularly young people do not need a constant reminder of all the horrible things happening in the world, as
television
 news channels have the tendency to over-report incidents, for ,example
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climate crises and war. Recently, it was reported in Sweden that children as young as in 4th grade are being diagnosed with anxiety,
as a result
 of too much pressure about climate change,
that is
 the consequence of them being exposed to
this
 from the news on tv, parents, friends and schools. Undoubtedly I support the side that states
television
 should mainly be used for entertainment. In conclusion,
television
 can be used moderately, to inform and educate the population when it comes to urgent issues. But in my opinion people, especially children should be allowed to use
television
 to “escape” reality in their leisure time.
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