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Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

#peop #e #children #fo #school #ffiey #gei #ev’e #schools #yot #r
People hold different opinions on whether it is necessary for their
children
 to go to
school
 as more and more convenient online courses appear. Some people think that learning online is a wise choice because it is more convenient in terms of time, in my opinion, studying at
school
 is extremely important and irreplaceable. Some argue that online learning is beneficial for both students and families
,
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 because today there are many resources or free courses, so students are free to choose which program is right for them
instead
 of always having to follow the pattern in class. Parents can
also
 directly supervise their
children
 in the learning and development process.
In addition
, the fact that students do not go to
school
 saves a large amount of money for the family
such
 as money for uniforms or travel
However
, I, like many others have always been in
favor
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 of learning at
school
 and consider it irreplaceable.
Firstly
,
children
 learning at
home
also
 means that they always need someone at
home
 to support them, while today's parents are busy with work to meet life's needs,
therefore
 It is very difficult for
children
 to learn at
home
 by themselves.
Second
,
children
 need to go to
school
 to have new experiences or insights into life. The reality
after
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 the covid 19 pandemic has shown that many people suffer from stress and even depression after a long stay at
home
. In short, the emergence of online lessons is quite useful when
children
 can improve their own knowledge but can never replace going to
school
.
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