Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

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People hold different opinions on whether it is necessary for their

children

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to go to

school

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as more and more convenient online courses appear. Some people think that learning online is a wise choice because it is more convenient in terms of time, in my opinion, studying at

school

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is extremely important and irreplaceable. Some argue that online learning is beneficial for both students and families

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because today there are many resources or free courses, so students are free to choose which program is right for them

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of always having to follow the pattern in class. Parents can

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directly supervise their

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in the learning and development process.

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, the fact that students do not go to

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saves a large amount of money for the family

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as money for uniforms or travel

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, I, like many others have always been in

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of learning at

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and consider it irreplaceable.

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children

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learning at

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means that they always need someone at

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to support them, while today's parents are busy with work to meet life's needs,

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It is very difficult for

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to learn at

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by themselves.

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children

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need to go to

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to have new experiences or insights into life. The reality

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the covid 19 pandemic has shown that many people suffer from stress and even depression after a long stay at

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. In short, the emergence of online lessons is quite useful when

children

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can improve their own knowledge but can never replace going to

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Computer are being used more and more in education. Some people say this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.