In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In some cultures, it is essential to own a
house
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compared to
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renting a
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.
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situation
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might be due to
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safe and
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an
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essay will explore the reasons why people choose to buy a
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and explain why I think having your own is
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
. People want to buy their own flats because owning a
house
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feels
more safe
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rather than renting a
home
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, when earthlings have their own real
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, they cannot face a
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such
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as a landlord forcing them to move out.
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, people may live in their homes peacefully.
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might be
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one of the reasons why a person chooses to buy a
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. Another reason can be due to
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an
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,
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because in
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countries traditions require buying a
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to become a grown-up.
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, In Turkey, when a member of the family
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to buy a
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, that member is free to leave their family
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. Because
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accomplishment means that
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member of the family had
became
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an
adult
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. By and large,
these kind
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of traditions might support the idea of having your own
house
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. Renting or owning a
house
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might depend on
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, but in my opinion, owning a flat is a huge success and a positive
situation
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. Because feeling safe where you live is a relaxing
situation
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, following some traditions can provide completing the process of becoming an
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. These two
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provides a positive environment in someone's life. In conclusion, owning a
house
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might be preferred because of feeling safe and becoming an
adult
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. From my point of view,
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situation
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creates a
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beneficial
benefitical
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beneficial
environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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