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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of palnts and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many
problems
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 start to appear in the environment around us, causing many changes in our lives. Some
people
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 think that the major environmental problem of our time is the extinction of some
animals
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 and plants, while others say there are important
issues
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 that need our attention. I believe there are more important
problems
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 that must be addressed. The extinction of one species may result in a wide range of environmental changes. Every habitat has its own ecosystem; any change in the species involved in
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 ecosystem may change the entire ecosystem, resulting in a slew of environmental
issues
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. To illustrate, Australia has one of the most diverse ecosystems in the world. In the early 20th century, the
last
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Tasmanian
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 tiger went extinct. Many years later, numerous cities complained of the rapid increase in the number of a specific animal called the
Tasmanian
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 devil. Those devils had been hunted by the
Tasmanian
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 tigers.
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, when the
Tasmanian
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 tigers became extinct, the Tabacarios devils continued reproduction and increased rapidly, causing many
problems
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 for the public in Australia.
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, many other
problems
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 may matter to
people
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 more, like global warming.
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 critical problem has become increasingly important to many
people
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.
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 increasing awareness about global warming comes from its enormous impact on our lives.
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, global warming is causing many changes to
animals
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' habitats, vegetation, food, and water sources.
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, it forces
animals
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 to migrate, and if they cannot adapt to a new, different habitat, they may become extinct in the future. In conclusion, there are various environmental
issues
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; some
people
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 believe that the main issue is that some
animals
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 and plants have been lost;
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, others believe that there are other critical
issues
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,
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 as global warming. I believe global warming is an increasing problem that needs our direct attention and all of our power to stop it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystem balance
  • Domino effect
  • Extinction
  • Medicinal properties
  • Potential medical breakthroughs
  • Climate change
  • Pollution
  • Deforestation
  • Habitat destruction
  • Severe weather patterns
  • Rising sea levels
  • Immediate threat
  • Universal challenge
  • Endangered species
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