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Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

#believe #children #speeches #presentations #school #skills #schools
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that
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school.
First
 of all, School is the foundation of
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education for
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kids. I believe,
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 should be strong, to make kid's
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 much more bright, which can be helpful for the world in the
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children
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 our
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ways to teach the kids and students as well.
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 giving speeches and
presentation
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 will make the classes more interesting than usual classes. Presentations include pictures, videos, and
also
 anime too. If a teacher includes all these aspects, and
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 speeches, surely in the
future
children
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confident,
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 to speak
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his/her own mind.
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, kids are very smart and strong in
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 feelings,
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computer skills needed to be taught. Because nowadays everything is connected to computing. In conclusion, I strongly believe all these skills can be very helpful to
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children
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