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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an artel called “The book that influenced me most”. Write a letter to the editor about the book that influenced you most.

#magazine #contributions #readers #artel #“the #book #most” #editor
Plastic
 bags,
plastic
 bottles and
plastic
package
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packages
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 are invented less than a hundred
year
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years
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 ago. They have been massively produced due to
its
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their
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 convenience and low cost.
However
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 they have raised
concern
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concerns
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 to
public
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the public
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 in the recent years. The main concern is the damage to the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
.
Firstly
, it is a
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waste
wate
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waste
 of land because it takes hundreds of years for the
plastic
 to break down in it. The microplastic will eventually
goes
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go
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 to the food that we grow.
Moreover
,
plastic
 bags and bottles could kill
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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such
 as birds and turtles.
Therefore
 we should find a way to reduce the usage of
plastic
 products. The government could achieve
this
 goal
by
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through
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 legislation and
bringing
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by bringing
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 awareness to
public
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the public
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. They can tax
the
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apply
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plastic
product
 so
people
 purchase less. The tax income could fund creative design on encouraging
people
 to consume less
plastic
product
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products
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 and research
on
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apply
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how to recycle the
plastic
product
 better.
Government
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The government
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 could hold events to educate
people
 on the damage of
plastic
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the plastic
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product
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products
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.
Government
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The government
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 could set up machines for
people
 to recycle their bottles. There are a lot of things for individuals to do to achieve
this
 goal. We can reduce the usage of
plastic
product
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products
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,
for
example
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 I have been using my own water bottle and a recyclable bag for shopping. We can
also
 shop directly from farmers’
market
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markets
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 where they use glass containers rather than
plastic
 bags.
Plastic
product
 is bad for
environment
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the environment
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. We should all do our part and make
this
 planet a better place.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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