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IN SOME COUNTRIES MORE AND MORE ADULTS ARE CONTINUING TO LIVE WITH PARENTS EVEN AFTER COMPLETING THEIR EDUCATION AND GETTING JOBS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWIEGH DISADVANTAGES

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In
this
 day and age, the vast majority of elders are still dwelling with their
parents
 ignoring the factors of completing education and receiving occupation. Personally, I consider that the drawbacks of
this
 issue is outperforms the advantages. In the forthcoming ,paragraph
this
 essay is going to discuss its reasons with relevant examples.
First
 of all, the main drawback of the current issue is depriving independent an individual.
In other words
, the grown-up individual could not learn the ropes of self-sufficiency
such
 as housework, cooking skills, laundry and etc.
Consequently
, they mature slowly but surely becoming a child
instead
 of maturing as independent people. A bright future pinned with
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a
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well-paid
job
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jobs
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 and possessions would not be achieved by an adult since he will not gain useful experience gained because of obstacles faced in independent life.
For example
, the recent news from BBC clearly depicted the countries of mature living with their guardian. Precisely, Kazakhstan showed the highest result of both not freedom and poor grown individuals.
Furthermore
, the vast majority of the elderly could be vulnerable to complicated obstacles occurred in life. To be more precise, in most cases many problems faced by mature dwelling with their
parents
 are usually tackled by their
parents
.
Consequently
, they are not gaining any paramount experience that could be used in tackling issues and making
a proper decisions
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a proper decision
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.
That is
 why the drawback entirely outdoes the pros. In conclusion, due to depriving independence and not gaining experience in solving problems the disadvantages of dwelling with
parents
 the disadvantages completely outweigh the advantages.
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