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With the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, due to the improvement
of
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 technology, people can write
letters
 by using
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technological
technical
technogical
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technological
 devices
such
 as computers and
cellphones
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.
Thus
, it is often argued that the skill of writing
letters
 on
paper
 traditionally is going to disappear eventually. I completely disagree with
this
 point and in the following
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 I will explain the reasons.
Although
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 more and more people tend to communicate with friends and
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colleagues
colleages
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colleagues
by
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technological
technogical
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technological
 devices, it is my opinion that
paper
letters
 still stand a
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significant
siginificant
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significant
 role. The reason is that when it comes to formal situations and the purpose of keeping important
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, writing or recording on
paper
 is more reliable and can be taken as
a
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stong
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 evidence.
For example
,
the
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corporations are more likely to sign the contrasts by using
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way
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, namely keeping
in
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paper
 documents. Because
this
 way can let the companies feel more safety and have more
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.
Moreover
, writing on
paper
 always represents the writers' strong feelings and love for the
reiceivers
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receivers
receiver
.
Thus
, people like to share their feelings by writing
down
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them down
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 on cards or
paper
letters
, especially on
the
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special days.
That is
 to
say
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 that handwriting has special meanings among
human
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 and will still be used in the future. In conclusion,
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 mobile phones and computers to communicate will keep growing, whereas in my view the importance of writing by hand will not be changed and disappear.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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