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Some people think that books should be stopped in schools and that videos, films, and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree?

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 as the mainstream of media plays a very important role in transferring information. Some
people
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 assert that the
internet
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 would take the place of
books
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 in the future.
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, in my opinion, each medium has its own advantages and disadvantages.
Books
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 will always hold a place in our lives. Admittedly, the computer has made our lives very convenient.
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, it can transform information instantly. It can tell us what happened in the world right away with very impressive pictures.
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, it plays an important role in education.
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 can study history, culture, language and cooking skills on the
internet
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. Even
books
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 are now available in electronic format (e-
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) and
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 the reason some
people
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 find it a threat to the traditional, physical, book.
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, we should not neglect the importance of
books
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 which are very convenient to carry and easy to get.
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 are available everywhere,
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 as in the library, in the bookstore, in your pocket or beside the pillow. After a day‘s ,work we can relax on our bed or sofa by reading a book or magazine.
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 are
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 very good travel companions.
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, it is very difficult to sit for long hours glued to the monitor screen. Eye strain and back pain are
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 some disadvantages of the
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. With so many power cuts, as in my country, we cannot rely on the
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.
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 but not least, the day is not far when all
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 will be able to afford an
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 connection. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, despite the threat of the
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, the book has maintained its place. So I feel we‘ll never go without
books
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 because they have served us so well for so long.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital mediums
  • visual and auditory learners
  • engagement
  • comprehension
  • outdated
  • interactive media
  • real-life scenarios
  • personalized learning
  • ecological impact
  • digital divide
  • screen time
  • tactile experience
  • memory retention
  • irreplaceable
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