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An organization has given an advertisement for a part-time job for local children. Write a letter to the administrator of the organization. In your letter Introduce yourself Why you think you are suitable for the job State when you will be able to join that job

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the position of kitchen helper as mentioned in the advertisement in the Canada Times newspaper. Currently, I am pursuing my Masters in Applied Computing from Wilfrid Laurier University. As I have one year of experience working in a Restaurant as a helper, I can be a suitable candidate for the role you are looking for.
Moreover
, I have received a food and safety certification, which can be an added advantage.
Additionally
, I am an expert at cooking and can prepare delicious dishes, especially from North India which was one of the main requirements in the job description.
Due to
 my lectures, I would be available after 2pm on weekdays, and I am flexible to work during weekends. Currently, I am not doing any type of job, so I am ready to join your organisation as soon as possible. Please find attached my resume for your reference. Thank you for your valuable time. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mitali Padiya
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task achievement
Make sure to mention all points required in the task description, such as introducing yourself, explaining why you are suitable for the job, and stating when you can join.
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Maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter, keeping it formal and polite.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is very well-structured, with each paragraph dedicated to a specific point. This clarity helps the reader easily follow your reasoning and makes your letter more effective.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are perfectly formulated for a formal letter, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.
task achievement
Your writing tone is polite and respectful, which is essential for making a positive impression on the reader.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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