Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although
, it is sometimes thought that it is
highly
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effective notion that advertising is influencing us to
buying
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products
,
others
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people
do not have a positive concern regarding
this
, they say it is
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the usual
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usual
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things
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. In my opinion, I believe that advertising
have
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a huge number of benefits for
encourage
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people
to purchase goods. On the one hand, advertising which are attracted
people
for purchasing things
by
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famous
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celebrity
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.If
company
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a company
the company
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is publicizing their new commodities,
people
is
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known about
this
.
In other words
, when
company
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a company
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want to launch new things, they hire well-known
people
who
advert
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their
products
with impressive description. The consumer
watch
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this ads
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on any kind of media
such
as Tv programme, blog
in
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internet
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the internet
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,
social
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and social
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media .
As a result
, they purchase
this
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this product
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products
and
this
point
advertise
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play
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successful
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role.
For example
, one of my
cousin
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buy a dress which she
watch
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on
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TV programme ads
,
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and surprise
this
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amazing quality representation.
On the other hand
, it is often believed by other
people
that advertising would apply themself to
people
appealing but it is excessive promoting.
In addition
, it
is
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bothered
people
by
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with
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their publicity.
For example
, whenever we watch any important news or lessons,
advertise
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disturb us to know information.
People
skip
this ads
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this ad
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and do not want to watch
it
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them
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at all.
As a result
, the company
is not go
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on with promoting their new
products
.
Therefore
, advertising is
short
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a short
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time
attracting
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to attract
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people
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attention for their promotional massage and day by day reduce
consumers
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attachment
of
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to
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buying
commodity
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the commodity
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. In conclusion,
which
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people
may vary in their opinions, I think that
advertise
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advertising
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will
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be useful
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useful
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use
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to encourage us to
purchasing
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purchase
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new goods when it
is reduce
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obsessive
promoting
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it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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