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Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement

#people #claims #waste #homes #governments #requirement
Waste
 is a serious dilemma today, and according to some
people
 it is not recycled enough by the general public. They claim that if the government made it a legal requirement to recycle, the issue would be less concerning.
Although
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the
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actions to preserve the environment should come from within, I believe laws and rules forced by the country would be a more effective strategy. I somewhat agree that a few
number
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 of individuals,
dont
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don't
 need regulations for them to
start
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reprocess
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waste
,
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 because they might already have the habit of caring for the environment and protecting it
by
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waste
 management
,
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 and raising awareness
to
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the ignorant society.
Additionally
, they tend to find the best resolutions that withstand the environmental issues at the present time. In my personal opinion,
although
 there are a few
people
 that care enough to recycle and reuse
waste
, most
people
 need directive instructions from a higher level to get them to reduce the use of
waste
. Punishments are what
brings
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 fear into
people
 so they stop
behaviors
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 that could lead them to a penalty, and
instead
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 they obey the rules.
For example
, if a fine was considered
to
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 every person who commits a bad act for the environment,
people
 will follow the laws and recycling
waste
 will be more common and less of a dangerous issue. To sum up everything , governments making a constitutional requirement for recycling
waste
 is the most convenient way out. More
waste
 will be reprocessed and reused because of the law enforcement system.
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