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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
Today, technology and other
advances
 offer us a huge range of opportunities. For
this
 reason, some individuals claim that
currently
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 we have an excess of
options
. From my point of view, I strongly agree with that perspective. At present, technological
advances
 in our existence cover all aspects, make our life easier, make us feel in control and prevent us from feeling worried.
First
 of all, there are some individuals that think that all these technological
options
 are a bad thing. They say that
this
 situation is making
people
 become lazy.
For instance
, nowadays, some
people
 use computer apps for things like deciding what they should have for lunch.
This
 is clearly making
people
 stop using their brains.
On the other hand
, I believe many
people
 have knowledge about technological
advances
. We cannot avoid technological
advances
 in our life.
For example
, we might have lots of
options
, when we wash our clothes, it has 2 selections. We can go to a laundry or wash at home, but many
people
 prefer to choose the easiest one. They would rather go to
a
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laundry than wash at home.
Moreover
, when we have lots of choices it prevents us from feeling worried. Some
people
 worry if they only have one option
,
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 because we prefer good quality when buying something. For ,instance when we want to buy a
phone
, we need to consider specifications, price and the brand of the
phone
. A lot of
phone
 stores offer a range of phones, from the cheapest to the most expensive ones. If we have lots of
options
 we do not need to worry, because we can buy a
phone
 that suits our budget. Having many
options
 some
people
 feel easier and prevent them from feeling worried. Some population feel that it is easier to choose something to buy and that it prevents them from feeling worried when they have many
preference
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. Soccer is easier than tennis.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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