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success is solely achieved by hard work, luck does not play any role. Do you agree or disagree?

#success #work #luck #role
Hard
work
 plays a big role in an individual's success. Even though there are other factors that can make someone successful. Some people have a belief,
besides
 hard
work
,
luck
 is a necessary thing that can change people's
life
. I don't agree with the statement.
However
, I believe that both hard
work
 and
luck
 are equally important on a journey to becoming successful either in our job or in real
life
.
Firstly
, It is undeniable that to become a successful person, hard
work
 is needed. We live in competitive
life
, so someone should break a leg for their job to become what they want. In fact, everyone has their barrier standard of success. Basically, to become successful we should consistently do our jobs and responsibilities. We can get a higher chance to achieve our goals, of
course
Add a comma
,course
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 we should
work
 hard.
On the other hand
, I believe and sometimes my parents said that
luck
 will come to someone who consistently hard
work
 and believes in themself. They will get paid what they wanted as long as they can
work
 hard and pray hard. Believing in ourselves and believing in our God are necessary things.
As a result
, It can guide our
life
 to become better in the future. In conclusion, I strongly believe that there are two factors that can change people's
life
. Hard
work
 and
luck
 are playing an important role to enhance an individual's
life
. So both are necessary to get a better
life
 and become a successful person.
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