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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In today’s modern era the developments in
agroculture
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agriculture
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 increased, but
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plenty of
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 over the world suffering from the lack of food. The main reason for that, is
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 number of people
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annualy
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annually
,
however
 new
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approaches
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against
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to starve
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.
This
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questions and will suggest some
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approaches
. At
first
, the present world lives in
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 of overpopulation and
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the ramifications
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 of
this
 problem in
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the agrocultural
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agrocultural
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agricultural
 sector. The new
reseraches
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research
researches
 found out that
today
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 population size reached a peak and rise tremendously. For
intance
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instance
,
Chinese
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 government make a law, which
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a
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 number of childbirth in each family. All these actions
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as
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a
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 size of
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Moreover
, many countries
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 a
multitide
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multitude
 of trying to reduce
lack
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 of products, like
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basic and
neccessary
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necessary
 nutritious
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consimung
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consuming
continuing
.
Therefore
, a lot of individuals used to waste a significant number of
foods
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food
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to
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unneccessary
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unnecessary
 things. Namely, water consumption is the biggest
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 type of consumption, which could be sent to
undeveloping
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undeveloped
 areas. Meanwhile, many international organizations, like UNESCO set up
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some
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charities which help
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starving
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 people in the world. To conclude, our
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social
is suffer
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a
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such
of
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issues from
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. Because of overcrowded on the Earth,
that
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lack
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a lack
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 of basic products. In order to solve
this
 problem people should prevent products and try to help by charity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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