Successful sport professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in order important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Nowadays, many
people
have
not the same ideas about the salary of athletes which should not be equal to alternative experts' income Add a missing verb
do have
such
as doctors, engineers, etc. There are
a rational Change the verb form
is
argument
on both sides of Fix the agreement mistake
arguments
this
contentious topic which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on the matter.
On the one hand, in my country, sport
Change the noun form
sports
professions
are celebrities .Replace the word
professionals
That is
, they are unbelievably popular and also
people
are passionate about following every sport
competitions on TV or social Change the noun form
sports
medias
which caused manifold money for broadcasts organs. Correct your spelling
media
Moreover
, owing to be
famous, the sportsmen are given huge salaries not only by their own federations and administrators Wrong verb form
being
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
by utilizing their fame for other businesses such
as establishing a restaurant, shop, cafe ,etc. Take " Ali Daei " the previous champion who owned a fancy restaurant for now in Tehran as a remarkable example; he is one of the richest athletes in Iran . However
, he is also
well-known as a gallant and generous person. It is my firm conviction that,
some other Remove the comma
apply
employs
deserve to be valued financially more than Replace the word
employees
sportive
occupations. To give an illustration, doctors who have been studying for Change preposition
in sportive
whole
life to save Correct pronoun usage
their whole
people
against divers
diseases work really hard ,so they are worthy of Correct your spelling
diverse
earn
much Change the verb form
earning
further
income .
On the other hand
, the downside is not ignorable. There are individuals Correct pronoun usage
who standed
standed
on the opposite side who believe sporty professions are likely to be given huge money Correct your spelling
stand
as a result
of spending their life up close to danger and pressure . In other words
, they might be injured during the difficult and breathtaking exercises in order to take part even in a simple competition. Hence
, there is an undeniable possibility that one gives up his carriers
Change noun form
carrier's
consequence
of bearing too much pressure. Correct article usage
a consequence
For instance
, " Messi " did not keep on his
sportive activities after breaking his leg during exercise.
To conclude, there are different opinions among humans about Change preposition
with his
amount
of currency that athletes and alternative functions earn. Several Add an article
the amount
people
, including me, assert that risky and laborious positions which our health or living depends on them,
must Remove the comma
apply
be treat
in Change the verb form
be treated
aspect
of Add an article
the aspect
an aspect
high level
currency, not works based on entertainment and commerce.Add a hyphen
high-level
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