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With a growing population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Feeding the world’s growing population is becoming an increasingly urgent challenge. Some people believe that genetically modified (GM) foods represent a viable solution, as they can help farmers increase yields at lower costs.
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, I believe that
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 technology offers certain benefits, the potential risks to human
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 and the environment suggest that more sustainable and natural alternatives should be prioritised. The global population is rising rapidly, and extreme weather conditions linked to climate change are making agriculture more unpredictable. In
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 context, GM crops are praised for their higher productivity and
resistence
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resistance
 to pests and disease. These traits can indeed contribute to reducing
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shortage
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 and supporting rural economies, especially in developing countries.
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, several
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 have raised
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 about the long-term effects of GM foods on human
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 a recent report by the European Parliament Research Service (EPRS), the excessive use of chemical inputs associated with transgenic agriculture may be linked to conditions
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 as early cancer and infertility,
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, it has been demonstrated that the nutritional value of genetically modifies crops is often lower than that the organic counterparts.
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 and policymakers are increasingly turning to sustainable farming methods,
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 as organic agriculture and regenerative practices, to ensure
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 security without compromising public
health
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. In conclusion,
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 genetically modified
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 can help improve crop yields and reduce hunger, its potential
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 risks and impact on
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 quality should not be underestimated. I believe that a combination of scientific innovation and sustainable farming practices is the best path to ensuring
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 security in the future.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • genetically modified (GM) foods
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • crop yield
  • pest resistance
  • health concerns
  • environmental impact
  • ethics
  • organic farming
  • food waste reduction
  • agriculture technology
  • biotechnology
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