Some people think that men and women have good expertise only in particular fields. This means men are better at doing certain jobs and women are better at doing some other jobs. Do you agree or disagree?

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era, equality became
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in the global world. Education play
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role in
women
's
life
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and
women
contributed effectively in many sectors as
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.
However
, still some people harbour a belief that
men
and
women
have good expertise only in some streams according to physical body
strenght
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strength
and brain skills. From my
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perspective
, I tend to stand with the former statement.
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positive
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aspects
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trends and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. There are
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of reasons to agree with the meritorious side.
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women
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not capable as man regards
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the
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physical strength. To probe more deeply, in the firefighter stream,
fighers
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fighters
need to go inside
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the building and control the fire.
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this
position, required more strength to carry the
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and guts.Another observation in
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regard
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is that
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women
are more skilled than
men
, there
are
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good expertise to present
and
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analysis of the views and provide effective feedback.
Secondly
,
Men
as the Father cannot be replaced by the
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mother
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position. There's no doubt that parents play a vital role in children's
life
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, but
mother
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the mother
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breed milk
to
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the baby and
this
role cannot
matched
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by the father.
Furthermore
,
Category
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of
men
and
women
contributed fully in the particular stream where they are very good at it. Needless to
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, all the point stands in the good stem. To sum up, all aforementioned above
as
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a
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clear
evident
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evidence
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that
the
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men
and
women
have good expertise only
in particular
fields.
However
, both gender
need
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to equally with respect and love.
Consequently
, I firmly agree
to
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the given statement.
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