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Some scientists recommend that formal education should start at the age of 4 or 5. In other countries it is recommended that formal education should start at 6 or 7. Discuss and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some scientists that
children
 should start
education
 at age of 4 or 5,
however
 other people guess that formal
education
 for kids should begin at the age of 6 or 7. I think that it depends on the kids and the counties where they live, to be exact both statements have some advantages and drawbacks.
Firstly
, beginning
education
 as early as possible has lots of advantages for
children
 in terms of their future because in childhood the brain is more flexible to new information and
education
 would be quite easier for the youngest people.
Moreover
, they will finish
school
 earlier and will have much time to choose and prepare for university.
For instance
, if 2
children
 went to
school
 in the same year but one of them is 4 and the
second
 is 7, they will finish
school
 in the same year with the same knowledge.
However
, the
first
 man will be only 15 and have 3 additional years for deciding what to do while the
second
 will be 18 and have to go to the army or attend university slightly after graduation from
school
 .
On the other hand
, it is not easy to study at age of 4 for everyone and sometimes
children
 who are younger might struggle with the
school
 program every lesson.
Eventually
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 they would earn less knowledge than they could.
In addition
, it is challenging for tutors to teach too little kids due to some
children
 at 5 years even can't go to the toilet alone, which would slow down educational progress. To conclude both ideas are good but they strongly depend on the situation because all
children
 are different and it is hard to teach a child who is not ready for learning new information.
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