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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year-old. Write a letter to the parent in your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sr/Madam, I am writing to you in regard to the advertising in the Australian magazine. I have read that you are looking for a babysitter for your six-year-old kid. I would be more than happy to go next week to your place to meet you and your family and have a chat. I am arriving in Australia tomorrow and I was looking for an au pair job. I love kids,
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 am a suitable person for the position as I know how to interact and play with kids. I would be able to help your child with homework and do recreational activities. Some of the reasons why I am travelling to Australia are to enjoy the stunning beaches and
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 to do a marketing course that looks very interesting. I will have to attend classes every Wednesday night, that would be the only day that I won't be available to look after your child. Let me know what you think about having a meeting next week. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Maria
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coherence cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
task achievement
A brief mention of your prior babysitting experience would add more depth to your application.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite.
logical structure
Your letter is well-structured, with each paragraph addressing a specific point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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