Smacking childern is the best form of discipline To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Disciplining
children
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is always been a crucial and difficult task for parents since the beginning of mankind. Some people believe that hitting
children
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is the best
way
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to teach them a lesson while others think it will bring negative impacts
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the
children
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. I definitely think that smacking
children
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is not an effective
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to shape
childrens'
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behaviour.
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of all, hitting
children
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is giving them a very bad example of using violence to solve
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the problem
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problem
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.
Children
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are very impressionable and they will take
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to their hearts and think that physical violence is a
way
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to sort things out. If
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child cant
take
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it out on
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adults
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who are stronger
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then
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than
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them physically, they might let it out
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those who are weaker ,
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instance
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their younger siblings,
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schoolmates or even on small animals.
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in future will
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create
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many social problems
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as domestic abuse ,
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and sexual
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and physical
assualt
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assault
, as when they grow up, they will continue to use violence to achieve their wants.
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, hitting
children
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will make them feel that they are not wanted or loved. As we all know,
children
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look up to their parents and are always seeking
thier
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their
love and approval.
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, they do
no
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not
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necessarily have the mental capacity to understand the good intention of the parents, which is to discipline them so they will not repeat the same mistake. They will feel hurtful , especially if the pain is imposed by the very person that they admire the most.
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emotional pain might haunt them till they are bigger, and the feeling of worthlessness will make them become less confident with low
self esteem
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. What is worse is they might abuse
drug
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drugs
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or alcohol to numb
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emotional burden that they carry with them since young,
genereting
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generating
a generation with
alot
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a lot
more social problems. in conclusion, beating
children
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might seem to be an instantaneous
way
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to discipline
children
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but in a long
run
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it will only produce
young
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a young
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adult
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adults
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who
are
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more
rebelious
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rebellious
and violent, which in
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turn
, will only bring more problems to the society and nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • smacking
  • punishment
  • behavior
  • childhood
  • communication
  • rebellion
  • consequences
  • alternatives
  • psychological impact
  • constructive
  • authoritarian
  • neglectful
  • abusive
  • controversial
  • divisive
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