Smacking childern is the best form of discipline To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Disciplining
children
is always been a crucial and difficult task for parents since the beginning of mankind. Some people believe that hitting children
is the best way
to teach them a lesson while others think it will bring negative impacts to
the Change preposition
on
children
. I definitely think that smacking children
is not an effective way
to shape childrens'
behaviour.
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children's
First
of all, hitting children
is giving them a very bad example of using violence to solve Add an article
the problem
a problem
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
Children
are very impressionable and they will take this
to their hearts and think that physical violence is a way
to sort things out. If a
child cant Correct article usage
apply
take
it out on Change the verb form
takes
adult
who are stronger Fix the agreement mistake
adults
then
them physically, they might let it out Correct your spelling
than
to
those who are weaker , Change preposition
on
for
instance
their younger siblings, Add the comma(s)
,instance
the
schoolmates or even on small animals. Change the word
their
This
in future will creat
many social problems Correct your spelling
create
such
as domestic abuse , sexual
and physical Correct word choice
and sexual
assualt
, as when they grow up, they will continue to use violence to achieve their wants.
Correct your spelling
assault
Secondly
, hitting children
will make them feel that they are not wanted or loved. As we all know, children
look up to their parents and are always seeking thier
love and approval. Correct your spelling
their
However
, they do no
necessarily have the mental capacity to understand the good intention of the parents, which is to discipline them so they will not repeat the same mistake. They will feel hurtful , especially if the pain is imposed by the very person that they admire the most. Correct your spelling
not
This
emotional pain might haunt them till they are bigger, and the feeling of worthlessness will make them become less confident with low self esteem
. What is worse is they might abuse Add a hyphen
self-esteem
drug
or alcohol to numb Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
this
emotional burden that they carry with them since young, genereting
a generation with Correct your spelling
generating
alot
more social problems.
in conclusion, beating Correct your spelling
a lot
children
might seem to be an instantaneous way
to discipline children
but in a long run
it will only produce Add a comma
,run
young
Add an article
a young
adult
who Fix the agreement mistake
adults
are
more Change the verb form
is
rebelious
and violent, which in Correct your spelling
rebellious
tunr
, will only bring more problems to the society and nation.Correct your spelling
turn
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