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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this

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In modern times, how to be a good person in society has become an essential part of everyday life.There are those who believe that
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 will examine both sides of the argument and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why
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teach
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teach
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children
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 how to be a good
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 in society,
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 fundamentals idea, good ways, helping
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.Perhaps the main reason why
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 the best for
teching
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teaching
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lesson
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practically.
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, guardians can always show
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,
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 a case for the idea that
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 can learn from school. perhaps the main reason why
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 of school is
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children
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 can get better knowledge by study. Like, By reading
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children
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 can get enough knowledge
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 to maintain
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 in a
scociety
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society
 or to become a good member. In conclusion, it must be said that teaching by
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 has become a complex issue with no easy solutions. But my opinion is that
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 proper and quite enough knowledge by seeing their
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, what they teach and shows to them to learn.In that way, they can be
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 of society.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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