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Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems.

#meat #health
Nowadays, vegetarianism has become more popular and people think eating
meat
 is not good for their bodies, so they want to be a vegetarian.
However
, in my view, I do not agree that eating
meat
 will cause serious health issues. In
this
essay
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 I will explore why I do not agree and try to convince you that eating
meat
 is good for the human body.
To begin
 with,
meat
 can provide a variety of nutrition for the human body, primarily, protein, which is one of the best ways to get your daily intake of protein. Chicken, pork and beef are some of the most available meats, which you can get from any superstore, along with many other options and 'cuts'.
For instance
, choosing fresh
meat
 that has not been pre-prepared is a good way to ensure there aren't any unnecessary preservatives and undesirable ingredients.
Furthermore
, in my opinion, when people worry about fitness problems from eating
meat
 it is because they eat too much
meat
. Like everything, eating foods in moderation is the key to a balanced and healthy diet.
For instance
, we need to be able to control how much food we really need, not just eat everything we want to. Oftentimes, people do not think about how many calories they eat in a day, and
meat
 can be very calorie-dense, so eating the correct-sized portion is important. No matter if you are a
meat
 eater or vegetarian, you will have health problems from eating too much fo od. In conclusion, eating
meat
 will not cause health problems, provided that it is a part of a balanced diet.
Also
,
making
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 sure to buy the highest quality
meat
 that hasn’t been processed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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