UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

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modern era,
employments
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rates are increased compared to the past.
However
, in some non-developed
countries
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unemployment
is one of the major issues rather than others.
However
, I personally believe that employment
is totally depends
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on a person’s skill and knowledge. In
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I will give what are the causes of
unemployment
and suggest some solutions related to
this
problem. There are many reasons behind
unemployment
.
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first
and foremost
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the government does not pass
the
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vacancies for uneducated society.
Secondly
, globalisation is
the
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one of the biggest problems behind the decreased rate
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the
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unemployment
.
Thirdly
,
educated
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community cannot satisfy
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their working life and low salaries affect
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mindset
and
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from
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they cannot find a specific company,
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paid more according to
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that they have.
On the other hand
, there
some
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solutions to solve
this
problem.
Firstly
, the government have to conduct a survey on joblessness and
then
give notices through the use of newspaper and advertisements. To illustrate
this
, recently Reliance group and TATA group passed the short notice for labours to work in their huge industries.
Lastly
, these types of industries can easily give
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jobs
to non-educated society and from
this
job sicker will have
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jobs
and earn
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money. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that there are lots of skills and courses whose will definitely increase the employment rates.
However
, somewhere the government would have to pass the open
jobs
and vacancies, where illiterate people easily get
jobs
and fulfil their basic needs from
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earnings.
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