UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

#unemployment #society

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modern era,

employments

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rates are increased compared to the past.

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, in some non-developed

countries

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unemployment

is one of the major issues rather than others.

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, I personally believe that employment

is totally depends

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on a person’s skill and knowledge. In

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I will give what are the causes of

unemployment

and suggest some solutions related to

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problem. There are many reasons behind

unemployment

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and foremost

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the government does not pass

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vacancies for uneducated society.

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, globalisation is

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one of the biggest problems behind the decreased rate

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the

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unemployment

Thirdly

educated

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community cannot satisfy

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their working life and low salaries affect

professional’s

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mindset

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from

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they cannot find a specific company,

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paid more according to

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that they have.

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, there

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solutions to solve

this

problem.

Firstly

, the government have to conduct a survey on joblessness and

then

give notices through the use of newspaper and advertisements. To illustrate

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, recently Reliance group and TATA group passed the short notice for labours to work in their huge industries.

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, these types of industries can easily give

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jobs

to non-educated society and from

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jobs

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money. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that there are lots of skills and courses whose will definitely increase the employment rates.

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, somewhere the government would have to pass the open

jobs

and vacancies, where illiterate people easily get

jobs

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earnings.

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UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that schools are too competitive and that this has a negative impact on children. Others believe the competitive environment encourages children to achieve. Discuss both views and give opinion

Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

in some countries , students live with their family while studying at a university . In other countries , students attend university in another city . Do you think the advantages of living away from family home while attending outweigh the disadvantages ?

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed.

Some children spend hours every day on their smart phones. Why is this, the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience