UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

#unemployment #society

this

modern era,

employments

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rates are increased compared to the past.

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, in some non-developed

countries

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unemployment

is one of the major issues rather than others.

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, I personally believe that employment

is totally depends

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on a person’s skill and knowledge. In

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I will give what are the causes of

unemployment

and suggest some solutions related to

this

problem. There are many reasons behind

unemployment

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and foremost

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the government does not pass

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vacancies for uneducated society.

Secondly

, globalisation is

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one of the biggest problems behind the decreased rate

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the

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unemployment

Thirdly

educated

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community cannot satisfy

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their working life and low salaries affect

professional’s

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mindset

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from

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they cannot find a specific company,

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paid more according to

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that they have.

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, there

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solutions to solve

this

problem.

Firstly

, the government have to conduct a survey on joblessness and

then

give notices through the use of newspaper and advertisements. To illustrate

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, recently Reliance group and TATA group passed the short notice for labours to work in their huge industries.

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, these types of industries can easily give

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jobs

to non-educated society and from

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job sicker will have

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jobs

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money. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that there are lots of skills and courses whose will definitely increase the employment rates.

However

, somewhere the government would have to pass the open

jobs

and vacancies, where illiterate people easily get

jobs

and fulfil their basic needs from

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earnings.

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UNEMPLOYMENT IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST PROBLEMS OF CONTEMPORARY SOCIETY. WHAT DO YOU THINK ARE THE MAIN CAUSES OF UNEMPLOYMENT? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

the family values are deteriorating ,what are the positive and negative changes? what is your opinion

Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance on the screen and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Research into new types of medicine and treatments are essential for improving health and deal with disease. Who do you think should fund these researches: private companies, individuals or governments?

What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?