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Parents should take course in parenting in order to improve the lives of their children to what extend do you agree?

#parents #course #lives #children
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Grooming plays a vital role in an individual's life. Some people think that
parents
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 should enrol themselves in parenting
courses
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 to improve the lives of their juveniles. Well, I agree with
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 prompt, but I will
further
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 describe others' views as well and
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 give an appropriate conclusion to
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 essay.
To begin
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 with,
parents
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 should take part in
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 kind of grooming programs, it will help them to understand their
children
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 and their view.
Secondly
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,
this
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 type of parenting course provides knowledge to the guardian on how to deal with little ones; nowadays
parents
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 are busy with their work so they are not able to find reasons why
children
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's behaviour is frequently changed, so if they join these
classes
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 it makes their life easy and
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 they are able to tackle all problems that they faced during parenting. Above and beyond
this
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, these
courses
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 are available online and they provide 3 to 4 weeks of parenting
classes
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 and give examples to the
parents
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 to know about real situations.
On the other hand
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, other peoples have different opinions regarding grooming
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 they think it is waste of
time
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 and money because these
classes
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 are very expensive and they do have not enough
time
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 to attend them.
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, if Individuals spend some
time
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 with their
children
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 so they improve their lives and help them in each and every situation
thus
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 taking parenting
courses
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 does not work if
parents
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 are not applied
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 in their real-life scenarios. In conclusion, I aver that taking parenting
courses
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 has to change and improve the lives of her heir and her
parents
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 are able to become good and responsible guardians
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 if they have no spare
time
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 for their
children
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, it is a waste to attend all these types of development
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