It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Whether young
students
should learn the Use synonyms
history
of their own country or that of other societies in the Use synonyms
world
has always been a topic of debate. Use synonyms
While
it is believed that learning the former is of greater importance, I disagree with Linking Words
this
perspective.
Some people are pro the idea of children learning national Linking Words
history
, and justifiably so. The key rationale in favour of Use synonyms
this
idea is that being aware of their roots can instil a sense of patriotism in each child. Linking Words
This
may foster an appreciation for the national heritage, which means that they are more willing to defend and contribute to their country. Linking Words
By contrast
, those who lack knowledge about national Linking Words
history
may not respect their traditions. Vietnam perfectly exemplifies Use synonyms
this
situation. As Linking Words
history
education in most schools is sadly lacking, many children have grown up with a superficial understanding of their ancestors' past achievements and sacrifices, Use synonyms
hence
their indifference to national current affairs. Linking Words
This
is a testament to the necessity of teaching schoolchildren local Linking Words
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.
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However
, I am convinced that it is far more beneficial for Linking Words
students
to learn national Use synonyms
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in parallel with Use synonyms
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This
is because acquiring insights into events that took place in other parts of the Linking Words
world
can Use synonyms
also
give Linking Words
students
a more holistic perspective of what happened in their localities. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, learning exclusively national Linking Words
history
could cause an individual to be biased and harbour hostile feelings about foreign people. Use synonyms
For instance
, in Vietnam, Linking Words
history
education mostly features how Vietnamese fought against foreign armies Use synonyms
such
as France and America, misleading many Linking Words
students
into thinking that people from these countries are evil. Use synonyms
This
outlook may be more impartial if they thoroughly understand past wars in an international context.
In conclusion. Linking Words
while
there are some justifications for considering local Linking Words
history
more important than Use synonyms
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history
, I would contend that schoolchildren will derive the most benefit from learning both.Use synonyms
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