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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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A group of
people
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 opines that
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the loss
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 of specific species of earth and
animals
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 are fast priority problem while some others view that the most significant are environmental problems. I completely support the latter proposition and will represent relevant points along with precise examples and back up my view.
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 of all, a significant number of trees and
crops
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 give us food,
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, the majority of
animals
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 help us either externally or internally. without
crops
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 difficult to survive for human beings. because most of the foods come from
crops
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 and
animals
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.
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,
people
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 are dependent on their food
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planets and
animals
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.
animals
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 provide us
meat
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with meat
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 and milk and trees provide different types of fruits and juices.
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, planets help us to provide Oxygen and decrease West product carbon dioxide from environments.
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, planets and
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 provide different types of medicines which help us to survive and cure discrete types of diseases.
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, pain killer drug morphine is made from a tree,
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, anti-snake venom is made from
animals
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' blood.
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, a group of
people
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are
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favour environmental problems.
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,
people
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 are polluting the air.
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, the public is suffering varieties of diseases.
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, they pollute water
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, as a consequence, pure water is reduced gradually,
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and even
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 the public is dumping many kinds of
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chemicals and plastic products on the soil, so the soil is decreased fertility. As it result,
crops
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 are not grown. In conclusion, it is obvious that
people
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 are finding the problem in the world and trying to solutions, whereas environmental problems are the main issue,
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, I restate my opinion again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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