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Some people believe the benefits of tourism outweigh the problems it creates in a particular place. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In
this
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 concurrent world, it's undoubtedly true that
tourism
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 is increasing around the globe due to plethora
reasons
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 but the main fact is due to
a low-cost flights
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low-cost flights
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is
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 not only
on
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 developed
countries
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. Some
people
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 harbour a belief that the benefits of
tourism
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 cause detrimental
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at
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 some
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place
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 while
while
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people
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 are
opposing
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 to
this
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 notion. In
this
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 essay, I will elaborate on the positive and negative impact of
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tread
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trend
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 and
thus
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 lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriad reasons to agree with the meritorious side.
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 and Foremost is the increasing number of tourists around the world, boosting the country's economy. To probe more deeply, visitors are paying
a
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visits
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 to
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place
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places
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,
pay
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and pay
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 tax fare tickets to the ticket and food industry, which
is
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indirectly benefits
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the
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.
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,
Switzerland
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in Switzerland
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 and Singapore
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is
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 the major money source
depends
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 on the
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 industries.
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, it's
clearly
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 that
tourism
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 has undeniable benefits. What is full half for some may appear half empty to
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others
.
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 So
people
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, in general, tend to distinguish that
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creating
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creates
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hazardous
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 in some places which
has
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 multifarious
side
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. Some
people
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 deem that the increasing number of visitors in the historical
place
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, not able to maintain the places without damage by the local management.Another rationale which hauls me to proton is increasing
a
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 number of products,
throwing
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 plastic material in the ground. To cite an example Ladakh is known as its beautiful
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, and
people
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 throw plastic material near the river causing issues for marine life.
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 it's apparent why many
people
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 are against
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 thread. In recapitulation, I reiterate that there
is
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 strong innumerable factors supporting the development of the
countries
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.
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 of restricting
tourism
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, the government can find
a feasible solutions
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a feasible solution
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 by enforcing the laws.
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, I firmly agree with the given statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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