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food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizer and better machinery.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion.

#food #fertilizer #machinery
It is true that nowadays,
people
 are enjoying cheaper prices of
food
 because of advanced technologies
such
 as
fertilizer
, facilities and high-output seeds. Despite its obvious advantages, I have to claim that some disadvantages simultaneously exist and need to be emphasized. In
this
 essay, I will detailedly discuss both of them. On the one hand, cheaper
food
 improves the life quality of the poor and solves the issue of hunger in some areas and nations. The solutions to high-quality as well as high-output
food
 are the most popular topic among all
food
 scientists. For
this
, they resort to designing a series of machinery and chemical materials, which promotes the competitiveness of seeds, their growing environments and production efficiency. These strategies absolutely enhance the output of
food
 and reduce their prices, causing a positive situation that the poor
people
 can enjoy more nutrition and
food
 and
thus
 escape from hunger.
On the other hand
, the employment of high-technique products
such
 as
fertilizer
 and
gene
 modification contains several risks to some degree, where the most impressive issue is
food
 security. Due to the prevalence of
gene
 modification, the
gene
 of some common foods
such
 as rice, tomato, and so on have been changed, leading to great advantages in output.
However
, there is an increasing tendency that
people
complain
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 about the degradation of
food
 taste. Beef, pork and vegetables lost their delicious taste which they used to have. Meanwhile, the implicitly negative impacts of
fertilizer
 and
gene
 modification are unclear. As some literature reported,
this
 modified
food
 might influence human health and incur more heart and blood sick.
Therefore
, the deployment of novel technology and chemical substance should be strictly verified. In conclusion, improved
fertilizer
 and better machinery reduce the price of the majority of
food
, mitigating the issue of hunger.
However
, the utilization of these techniques should be careful because
people
 have not totally understood the underlying risks.
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