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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #st #century #life #quality #times
In my
view
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 there
is
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are
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 some advantages and disadvantages. I want to say that
life
 in
21st
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the 21st
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 century
more
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is more
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 comfortable, easier for
people
 and modern as well.
Life
 in previous
times
were
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 simply hard for
people
.
Firstly
, nowadays we are living in modern
life
,
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 because we have even all for
comfortable
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life
.
For example
, technology-it is our phones, TV, computers, cars, trains,
planes
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and planes
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.
Also
 our medicine,
economic
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economics
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,
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and politics
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politics
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 era is good than in previous
times
. It
is
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all makes our
life
more
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easier. Technology
help
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 us to do some
works
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. In previous
times
people
 lived very
good
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well
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 without these gadgets, I can say that
people
 in previous
times
 enjoyed every moment in their
life
.
People
 were kind and they usually had
real
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the real
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conversation
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conversations
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 more. In another way, nowadays the world
have
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really
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a really
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 worth ecology system
,
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 because
people
 throw rubbish everywhere and it
is destroy
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is destroying
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 our ecology. In previous
times
 countries often had
argues
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between
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with
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 each other,
so
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apply
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this
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which
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 led to war. After that there
were
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was
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a crisis
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crisis
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, so were too
much
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many
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 poor
people
.
Also
 in previous
times
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 medicine was weak. And
people
 could just
died
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die
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 when they had
simple
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a simple
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 illness. In previous
times
people
also
 lived without technology, so it was difficult.
For example
,
people
 could not
contacted
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be contacted
contact
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 by phone or could not
watched
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watch
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 TV so they usually did not know about
news
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the news
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 in the world. In conclusion, I want to say that
people
 in
21st
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the 21st
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 century have a better
life
 than in
previous
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the previous
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time
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times
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. Sure now we evaluated, but I guess it will
be
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happen every
next
 century.
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