Governments suits pain money on railways whether than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Many people nowadays see governments building
railways
for the citizens around their cities and paying less attention to
roads
if compared to
railways
and
roads
everyone in the city can see that
railways
clearly are more than
roads
significantly.
To begin
with,in my ,opinion I agree with governments to build more
railways
because ,on one hand, there can make facilities for people who live in town.
For example
,
railways
can reduce the distance in the city and can due to people around here having more relationships but
on the other hand
, building
railways
used money and used much force to construct compared with building
roads
.
However
,I think in the long term that will be good for citizens in the city.
Next
,I will talk about
roads
even though I said
railways
are better than
roads
but I didn'
t
say to use all time and cash on
railways
because
railways
are one of the solutions to help citizens in town but not all of the solutions anythings have profits and drawbacks so in my opinion don'
t
use one thing to solve all problem.
For instance
, sometimes
roads
are useful and can transfer things to individuals easier than
railways
because
railways
are used
time
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to construct and
specific
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so there can'
t
use for some time but
roads
can do it. In conclusion,I strongly agree with the government's paying money to
building
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build
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railways
but I suggest building more
roads
too because those two things have their own profits and their own drawbacks government can pay attention to
railways
but don'
t
forget the
roads
.
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