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Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalization a positive or negative development.

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Some individuals think that the world convert into a village due to the development of modern technology while others think
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 is not good for any nation in the world. My opinion on above mention statement is quite different as I believe that globalization has both advantages and disadvantages.
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 of globalisation come smaller
people
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 who live in one corner be able to communicate with other
people
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 who live in another corner.
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, diseases are rapidly spread all over the
countries
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 during short periods due to
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 reasons. In the past, there were no developed transportation and communication techniques used. Now
people
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 share their knowledge, ideas and technology to improve their quality of living.
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, in any incident occurred anywhere within a few minutes it flies all over the nation. As an example, in emergencies happen like tsunamis authorities have facilities to inform
that other
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countries
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 which are get affected and save lots of lives from
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disasters. Despite above mention ideas, many communicable diseases can spread to all the
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 due to close contact among nabor
countries
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. A clear example we experienced was Corona pandemic.To stop the spreading authorities introduced travel distractions.
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, I conclude that, when considering the above factors, globalization has many pros and cons.
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, as
people
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 who live on earth, we have to apply these wisely.
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