Some people think news has no connection to people's lives so then it is a waste of time to read news paper and watch television news programs To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the present day, with the advance of urbanization and technology resulting in a fast-paced world, a plethora of
people
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tend to
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that visual
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entertainment
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lifestyle
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and is becoming useless. I strongly agree that these developments will
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more negative impacts than
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and foremost, having
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eye on
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has always been numerous benefits over the
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two decades.
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gives a medium to all kinds of
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a proper form of information about
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knowledge and it keeps them up to
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,
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follow
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in every section
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have always
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about the world.
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, a
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read
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a lot
will always
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a
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intelligent
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even if he is not very wealthy.
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,
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nowadays are so busy
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making their
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. They hardly have time to watch a movie to get some
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entertainment
.
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,
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modern content is no more
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and
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makes no glitter for the
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person
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, a writer will always get inspired by true stories and by nature,
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flashy media will not provide them
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a fascinating ideas
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a fascinating idea
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to get
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what he is looking for. The other significant reason for supporting my view is that they
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as a robot in
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contemporary world means that they do not have adequate awareness that what is going around them. It makes them less interactive
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person
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in
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social
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. To illustrate, in
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gallery full of talented
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person
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that robotic
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may not survive and it
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.
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could result in a decline in
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's basic
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. To conclude, it is not a healthy sign to cut off from the environment by reading a blog or watching a piece of information. In the
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this
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will need to be addressed if we are to avoid damaging impacts on
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and society.
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