Humans tend to copy one another , especially in fashion,choice of clothes ,consumer goods .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People
dress and purchase the same products
like
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one
another in
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society
. Personally , I don't believe
this
is entirely true and the following paragraphs shall explain
for
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this
standpoint.
Firstly
, the main reason why humans tend to behave the same way is
because
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they feel more secure and accepted in the community.
One
real life
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example
for
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this
is when famous celebrities like Selena Gomes launch
post
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posts
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on social media about what kind of makeup they put on ,
people
all over the world including
non fans
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would be encouraged to buy the same makeup because they want to be like Selena and be liked by the
society
.
This
is because if
one
doesn't follow the day-to-day fashion styles and other trendsetters,
one
is deemed to be
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as 'outdated' and
therefore
more likely to be judged and ignored by his peers and colleagues. Allied
to
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the above , humans are quite competitive in nature.
Therefore
some
people
with high pay or
have
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generational wealth will have luxurious taste ,
will
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buy expensive goods from
high end
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brands like Gucci, Chanel and Prada
for example
.
This
is because possession of
such
goods will give them a sense of high status .
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others may simply settle down for something that
fulfills
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their basic requirements.
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there are some
people
who like to be perceived as 'unique'.
Therefore
they may not follow social norms but believe in themselves and create
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entire look for
them
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despite whatever
society
thinks about them. To conclude, in my
opinion
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I do not entirely agree that
people
copy
one
another in everything because it really depends on
one
's likes and dislikes and how they want to be seen by
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society
.
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