Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These
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of progress in a significant number of areas
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as technology some people think we have more choices than in past
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which I agree with. But why is that?
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with, one of the most noticeable events that happened in the
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centuries was not allowing women to attend school or even work. They were forced to only do
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and take care of children.
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, it can be said that these
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, the majority of females are allowed to study whatever they want and be equal to men which leads to more options and choices for them. As an illustration, in
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countries, around 70 years ago schools and universities did not accept young girls and they were not allowed to drive cars.
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,
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the progress humanity has had in a lot of parts especially technology we are facing new majors for studying
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as biotechnology which is biology in a more professional way.
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adults in the past
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preferred to educate themselves, now teenagers are interested
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some jobs which they like and gain money from without even having a certificate.
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, there is much new stuff
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human beings
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not expect will happen in the future.
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, applications like TikTok and
YoTube
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YouTube
are providing a place for people to gain a great deal of money without any certificate. In conclusion,
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the reasons I mentioned above,
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, figuring out subjects and jobs I consider, nowadays, the public has more chances in different parts and it will have unimaginable choices in the future as well.
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task response
Address the question directly and provide a more balanced argument by considering both positive and negative aspects of having too many choices.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by organizing your main points more coherently and developing a clear introduction and conclusion to your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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