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The government is responsible for protecting a nation’s cultural identity. Some people think it is the government’s duty to ensure that new buildings are built in a traditional style. To what extent do you agree?

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Cultural
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The cultural
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 identity of a
place
 is an important factor in
concept
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the concept
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 of
place making
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place-making
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. It describes the values, meaning and common conception that
general
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the general
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 public
have
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has
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 about a specific
place
. Since ancient history, the
buildng
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building
technlogy
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technology
 has improved day by day. I
beleive
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believe
as
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that as
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 a nation people should protect their unique cultural
identies
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identities
 because the
tradions
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traditions
 and values need to be protected for their future generations.
Furthermore
, some individuals
beleive
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believe
 that the government regulating bodies should make laws to build new buildings in a
tradional
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traditional
 style. As we examine
the
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history we can identify different styles of buildings in different eras.
Therefore
, I do not agree with the statement because as a new generation we need to showcase our technological advancement to
the
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future generations.
Moreover
, there are lots of new technologies available in the world to enhance the quality and safety of the building. So we need to develop our buildings to resist the
morden
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modern
 day natural disasters.
However
, there are some protected areas for
it's
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 heritage value. In
such
areas
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,areas
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 government should enforce the law to protect the quality of the
place
. Every building needs to be designed to respond to
it's
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its
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 macro and micro
environement
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environment
.
Furthermore
, qualified
buiding
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building
 designers should consider the value of the
place
 when they design a building.
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