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Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people think that a great player who performs magnificently on the playground has inborn qualities. While others imagine that to be a world-class performer it is necessary to show dedication, concentration, and more focus on the practice field. In
this
 essay, I will explain both aspects and state my opinion. On the one hand, many sportsmen in the world seem to be successful in their life. They are very much intelligent and popular as well. But some of them have a natural power behind the success believed by many people.
For instance
, Lionel Messi is the greatest footballer of all time and is a super talent who won the
third
 world title for his nation. His supernatural magical sports make worldwide fans and followers.
On the other hand
, It is said that hard-working and regular practice turn people on the ladder of success. Not all performers have a natural quality, so most of them have to do strenuous work out to perform better.
However
, many of them are comes from underprivileged areas, and sometimes governments are not able to support them properly, especially in poor countries.
For instance
, the Afghanistan cricket squad has faced lots of difficulties to get sponsorships or raise funds, and a good coaching environment.
Moreover
, the hard work and dedication of the players make it a more successful team in the t20 format. In my opinion, It is easy to say that to be a successful entertainer strong work and practical experience are mandatory. But sometimes, some extraordinary qualities
also
 have shown a major role in the success of life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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