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The best way to reduce crime among youngsters is to teach parents good parenting skills. Do you agree or disagree.

#crime #youngsters #parents #skills
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Around the world, There is a belief that if
parents
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 provide good motivations and morals
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 youngsters can be done fewer crimes.
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 to
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 Good parenting
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 improve
youth
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 bad behaviour.I totally agree that good Parenting plays a hugely significant
impact
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 on
youth
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mindset
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 with respect to bad
mindset
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. In analysing the Capabilities of inbuilt
qualities
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 of
Parents
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 and
teachers
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' role, as well as Guidance given to
parents
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 by the public and private organizations.
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,
Youth
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 can be motivated by the parent's and
teachers
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' suggestions.In ,general before teaching direct books knowledge to
children
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teachers
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 have to motivate
first
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 with different points if required with practical examples of how to live and acquire good
qualities
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 so that
children
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 will get attracted to those behavioural notes.
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, it is clear that
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' and
teachers
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' roles will have a huge positive
impact
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 on kids.
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, nowadays Private and public organizations have a vital role in
youth
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mentalness
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metalness
.
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, These firms are conducting
a
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many seminars on how to live with and behave with good
qualities
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 and how not to addict to bad things on daily basis.
Youth
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 should be encouraged to participate in these
type
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 of sessions so that they will acquire Good
qualities
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 and eliminate
the
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bad behavioural manners.
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 it is widely known that Public and Private firms have a huge role in
children
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's mindsets. To summarise,
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 and
public
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 Organizations have a positive
impact
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 on
children
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's behaviour. It is Agreed that Good Parenting plays a hugely significant
impact
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in
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youth
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mindset
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 with respect to bad
mindset
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. After a thorough analysis of
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 subject. It is predicted that
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Parents
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 along with some small guidance from
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the organisation
an organisation
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organisation
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, teens will lead the best life in society with good manners and behaviour.
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