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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness. In spite of greater responsibilies. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Life
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 consists of various phases and each phase has its own charm. It highly depends on your perspective of living a good
life
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. Teenage or
adult
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life
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 brings joy in different ways despite the duty each of them carries. We will discuss it more in detail in the following paragraphs.
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, let us discuss the teenage phase. The years spent in teenage lives are
one
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 of the best according to the surveys conducted.
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, it solely depends on which environment you are currently in. Poor teenage children have liability even in
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 phase and cannot really enjoy these years as they struggle for bare necessities. They feel the need to grow up and start earning for their family and
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, are not happy in their teenage years.
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, middle-class and upper-middle-class teenagers are able to make the most of it as they do not have many obligations towards their families.
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,
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 can or cannot feel happy about their teenage
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 mainly due to their surroundings. Now comes
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life
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, wherein you have various opportunities to work and earn for a decent
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.
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, irrespective of background,
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 can start applying for jobs and become independent.
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 can
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 start planning to save for future stability.
Adult
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life
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 comes with various responsibilities like planning finances, starting a family,
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and repaying
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 loans but, if planned well can result in a smooth and comfortable
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.
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, good planning can result in a great deal of happiness.
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, there are some people who shy away from taking responsibility and don't feel happy about it. To conclude, teenage
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 or
adult
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life
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 comes with its own challenges and happiness depends on the ability of a person to make the most of it based on the surroundings he is in.
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