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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There have been arguments about several problems that the global is facing,
such
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 as running out of
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 sources,
however
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, referring to
insects
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 as a
food
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 source has been a discussion. In
this
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 essay, I will illustrate my point of view and support it with examples as well.
First
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 of all, we are all aware and acknowledged the significance of
food
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 and how
food
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 poverty is a serious problem,
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, from my perspective, I do not believe that
insects
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 could bring us any good
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 harmful diseases and we can clearly see how that turned out when people started to eat dangerous types of
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such
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 as bats, nowadays the whole globe is suffering from covid-19 and it is all because some people ate questionable
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 without considering the consequences.
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 the harm that the
insects
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 will be causing for human physical health, eating
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 will affect the environment as well. Every insect has a specific function to do,
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, bees are responsible for the plant's nectar,
nonetheless
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, bees have a huge impact on the plants' living system,
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, killing them will influence the whole ecosystem. Despite all the certain facts, I believe that eating
insects
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 are against human nature. In conclusion, we should not rely on
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 permanently because it has disadvantages more than advantages.
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 is why the government are supposed to search for a safe and healthy alternative to
food
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 products rather than causing harm to human and living creatures' health and affecting the whole ecosystem.
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