Some people believe that it is better to live and work in a vertical city with multiple tall buildings, as compared to a horizontal city with fewer tall buildings. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a bitter truth that with industrialization and the resultant progress of the human race, the flora and fauna of the planet have been adversely influenced.

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has risen debate where some are quite pessimistic and believe that it is better to live in skyscrapers; whereas a few others deny

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and say that

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with more

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and fewer apartments are better. Both

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views and my opinion are discussed

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. Considering the former view, many people think pessimistically mainly because nature is preserved.

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, fewer trees are cut in order to build new houses which helps in preventing deforestation and soil erosion.

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, the animals and plant won't lose their natural habitat.

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, individuals need to travel less which leads to less pollution.

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human

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population has increased rapidly in

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century. It is impossible to have

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a house for each individual

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there will be no space left for

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and plants.

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, discussing the views of those who believe

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a townhouse

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townhouse

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than apartments, the most vital issue is the quality of life is decreased and

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of an individual is compromised.

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, a person

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a private gym and swimming which is not possible in apartments.

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, parking issue is

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another reason why an individual

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living in a townhouse.

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, a family living in two bedroom apartment can only get two parking slot, while the family have three vehicles. To give my opinion and to conclude, I would certainly voice that it is better to leave in a tall building and preserve the environment.

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can be done by developing cities with more skyscrapers, which I believe

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lot of countries,

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and people have begun to do.

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