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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opininon.

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In our up-to-date life, e-learning is getting more and more well-known. Several indivuduals strongly believe that online
education
 has so a
lot
 of positive aspects that it will replace face-to-face
education
 frequently. Other
people
 suppose that traditional
education
 is irreplaceable. Now, I will examine and I will discuss both of them. From my point of view,
second
 point is more and more efficient for
people
. On the one hand, these days, a
lot
 of individuals say that online
education
 is convinient and young andold
people
 are able to learn something easily
way
. Take as an example: according to the statistics, these days' 80 per cent humans prefer to choose e-learning than
offline
education
, because, it has more benefit aspects for individuals.
In addition
 to that, it may be cheaper because of, many
people
 do not afford to spend a
lot
 of money.
On the other hand
, in our modern life, many humans suppose that, online
education
 is not efficient than
offline
education
, because of, a
lot
 of children are playful and they do not understand online lessons. If they are learn everything on
offline
 course,
as a result
, probably, their study is more and more effectively than others
way
. Take as an example: according to scientist point that,
offline
education
 is effectively for young
people
.
In addition
 to that, it is the best
way
 to get knowladge easily
way
. In the final analysis, traditional
education
 is more and more easily
way
 to get knowladge
besides
 that, it is effectively for young boys and young girl.
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