Nowadays more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the adventages of this trend for individuals overweigh its disadventages for the environment?

In the modern era , everyone enjoys their life due to the
cars
and they don`t have any problem with them . Some
masses
believe the uses of their own
cars
have more advantages as compared to disadvantages of nature , whereas others think it has both the same advantages and disadvantages. I totally agree with the latter statement and will discuss it in the upcoming paragraphs .
To begin
, with the advantages of
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cars
.
First
and
the
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foremost reason is
that
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that car
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cars
save our
time
in any kind of
emergencies
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such
as if anybody has a serious illness
in
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the
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home so we don`t have to worry about an
abulance
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ambulance
abundance
when it will come and ill
masses
go
hospital
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because individuals have
cars
so they can take care about
time
.
Moreover
, if peoples start the
uses
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of the public transport system
then
they might be late for their jobs because
buses
have so many stops and sometimes
buses
are
full
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rush of
masses
as well as
buses
don't have
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time
.
For example
in
the
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2010 a survey was conducted by UNO which indicating about the late issues due to so many stops of
buses
and folk
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been suspended from their jobs .
On the other hand
, if peoples start using their own
vehical
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vehicle
then
the level of CO2 will be inclined and one day there is no life on the earth because human beings are cutting down
billion
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of trees every year so how they can control the level of CO2 and due to overuse of
technical
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technology
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they must lose their saving as well .
Furthermore
, if
masses
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do not stop the regular use of
cars
then
one day they will finish
fuel
and it will be
a
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time
individual become feel regretful about the overuses of technicals.
For instance
, in the year ,2015
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news was a trending article about consume of
fuel
and its result was 30 %
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of fuel
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people lost
from
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the earth . In conclusion , if
masses
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reduce the use of
cars
then
it is possible to overcome the
issues
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issue
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of losing
fuel
and it is the batter way to use
fuel
in the long term as well as if the
goverment
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government
fixes
time
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the time
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for public busses and they start new busses
then
it is the one way to decline in uses of personal
vechcials
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technicals
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventages
  • disadventages
  • trend
  • individuals
  • overweigh
  • environment
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • transportation
  • time-saving
  • efficient
  • commuting
  • independence
  • freedom
  • travel
  • ownership
  • status
  • employment opportunities
  • automobile industry
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • climate change
  • traffic congestion
  • loss of green spaces
  • wildlife habitats
  • dependence
  • fossil fuels
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