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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be dirverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the adventages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

With the thriving development of
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, there is a revolutionary impact on transport. All the vehicles
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 as cars, buses and trucks will be driven automatically.
Although
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 some
people
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 argue that driverless
transportation
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 may lead to some adverse effects, I consider that there are more benefits for the community than drawbacks. There is no denying that
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 driving will result in some concerns, like a loss of jobs and a rising insecurity from passengers.
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many
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 rely on their skills driving to make a living,
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 as taxi drivers, ship sailers and aeroplane pilots, and
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 innovative
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 will directly replace their jobs.
Therefore
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, it is predictable that there will be a tidal wave of unemployment in society.
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since the public has been used to having human drivers for a long time, they may think it quite insecure if all the
transportation
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 works automatically
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 because they feel things are out of their own control. It is machines to decide their destination and safety.
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, more
people
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 may become resistant to
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 development. Despite all
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 it may have, The positive effects of driverless
technology
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 still outweigh the negative ones.
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 with, it ensures significant safety. Since all the functions are processed by programme code and machine, the stability of driving is obviously higher than human being. Actually, it is more dangerous to drive by humans
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 many illegal behaviours
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 as alcoholic driving and drug driving.
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, automatical driving can avoid all the accidents
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.
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, it helps
transportation
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 become more efficient and affordable
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 because there is less labour required. There will be a reduction
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 delay for all types of vehicles.
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, lower down the need for human drivers can reduce costs, and it may reflect in a cheaper price for
people
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 to take those mass
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.
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, despite some worries about a loss of jobs and distrust among
people
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, I consider automatical driving can make
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 more safe, stable and efficient.
It is clear that
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 the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. In fact, we should embrace
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technology
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 and expect it to create a more advanced environment of driving for all
people
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 in society.

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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Strive to fully address all parts of the task consistently throughout the essay; this includes maintaining a balance in discussing both advantages and disadvantages.
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